One day there was a boy called Kai, every day he went to the shop to buy coookies they have fudge and marshmallows in them. When he went to the shop to buy coookies he saw his worst enemy Ryan Miller. Kai avoided Ryan and got the groceries like his Mum told him to but he had extra change he looked at the coookies so did Ryan but it was the last one! They both raced towards it “STOP!” the manager shouted he picked up the coookie shuved it in his mouth with the crumbs rolling down this beard and told the boys to get out they both went home angrily.

2 Responses to “100 WC The last coookie!”
  1. Gorge says:

    I love it although improve on oppenings

  2. Hi Josh,
    Thank you for your 100 Word Challenge story. I really enjoyed reading this – do you think the shopkeeper made the right choice to stop the fight?
    I liked the way you clearly described things in your story, like telling the reader what the cookies had in them and about the shopkeeper having crumbs rolling down his beard – these really helped me to picture the events of the story.
    Next time, can you be more careful with your sentences? There are a few sentences here which are too long and need splitting up, either with connectives or punctuation. Which ones do you think I mean?

    Keep up the good work!
    Mr Hyde
    Team 100WC
    Willoughby, Lincolnshire, England

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